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(Got premission from SixBears!) ~
I made a new story but I'm iffy about it. It's going to be a series, I have each book semi-planned. The first book is called Brothers, main characters are Seth and Anthony Slitherin. The whole series is about many types of un-human beings being at war, some are alllies, most are enemies. In the first book, Brothers, Seth and Anthony find out they're brothers after a few months, they had met in the woods when Seth was badly injured after trying to fight off a Spirit named Derio, a very large Grizzly Bear. ~ First Page tells you more about the story..... Let me know what you guys think so far of it, it'll really really help! |
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Darkseeker
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It's lovely, and it's a good start! |
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Shadowcreeper said:
It's lovely, and it's a good start!
Thanks! |
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Empress Midnight said:
Hmm...very interesting
lol, I try my best to make things that way |
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Hi! I am actually an English Literature student (third year!) focusing on creative writing, so I think I can give you a few tips! The story is quite interesting so far. I think it would be helpful to establish some world-building, especially at the start when Asher is running through the woods, describe what the character is seeing, smelling, and physically feeling. This will really help the reader feel immersed. You can also world-build by establishing where the setting is set, such as the country (whether it's real or made-up), the connections between different supernatural beings (for example, do vampires and shapeshifters hate one another for being different, etc.). I would also suggest to not use pictures of what your characters look like, it's much more involving and immersive to describe your characters when writing. And my last suggestion would be to try not to focus too much on what will happen in future books. It is good to have a 'map' of what you want to happen and how to piece them together, but try focusing on your first story and how you want it to come together and feel complete. I look forward to reading future chapters and seeing how this story unfolds, and I hope some of my tips will be helpful! |
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LemonSnoodle said:
Hi! I am actually an English Literature student (third year!) focusing on creative writing, so I think I can give you a few tips! The story is quite interesting so far. I think it would be helpful to establish some world-building, especially at the start when Asher is running through the woods, describe what the character is seeing, smelling, and physically feeling. This will really help the reader feel immersed. You can also world-build by establishing where the setting is set, such as the country (whether it's real or made-up), the connections between different supernatural beings (for example, do vampires and shapeshifters hate one another for being different, etc.). I would also suggest to not use pictures of what your characters look like, it's much more involving and immersive to describe your characters when writing. And my last suggestion would be to try not to focus too much on what will happen in future books. It is good to have a 'map' of what you want to happen and how to piece them together, but try focusing on your first story and how you want it to come together and feel complete. I look forward to reading future chapters and seeing how this story unfolds, and I hope some of my tips will be helpful!
Thanks for the tips! |
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Third Chapter is out now! I'm going to start on the forth and try to start making the chapters longer :) |
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I was reading in a old witches voice and i got interested instantly xD |
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