Starlight✨ said:

I was reading in a old witches voice and i got interested instantly xD

Honeybee_Falls said:

Funny story, this site actually taught me how to write about five years ago and I haven't stopped writing since. At that time, I could form sentences you would expect from a middle schooler. I may not remember who some of the people who gave me feedback were, but their advice sticks with me to this day.

One person told me to just be extremely overkill when describing things at first. Like, consider every single aspect of something. Hit all the five senses and how your character reacts to each. They even worded it as "describe the veins in the leaves if you have to" (although somewhat as a joke).

The more you force yourself to write extremely descriptive, the easier it is to pump out immersive scenes in the future.

However, not all scenes need lots of detail. Sometimes, leaving things up to the imagination leaves rooms for readers to create the detail in their own minds and make it seem more personal for them.

Really, you have to practice to find what works where. I just like to sit outside and overly describe where I'm sitting as a practice for that exercize. I find it rejuvinates my writing when I tend to fall into a groove where everything is about the same or has simplistic sentences in it.

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But, I like how you've written the story so far. It looks great!

Honeybee_Falls said:

There's also a lot of places online that give good questions to get you thinking about worldbuilding. I use an absolutely massive list from The Novel Factory. It's important to note that you don't need to answer every question. You just need to look at it with a critical eye and have fun with it. Never make developing the story a chore- always keep it interesting until you get to a point where those rough spots need refined