I crave validation, nah XD just kidding, although that is partly true. I am mostly looking for contrsuctive criticism on my writing, I see something wrong with it, I aim to get better.

So with that let me just link some examples and I would like it if y'all could comment some tips/criticism. (Compliments are okay also)

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Examples.

1. Raina's Story Wrote this today in my spare time-

2. Sameen's Backstory

3. took me four hours I need someone to proofread or something- help me out Raven's Story

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Let me know if The links don't work so I can fix them-

And note to the mods, I had no idea where to put this, if it's in the wrong sub forum please move for me, thank you.

You could practice writing similes and integrating idioms into some places, if preferred.

There was an exercise we used to do in Creative Writing where the teacher would put up a picture on the projector screen of a location, like a cabin in the woods, or a marketplace, and we would write out a scene while incorporating the five senses into it.

"The woods were a little musty, and Aril observed particles of dust as they floated down the citrine sunbeams, like little boats cascading in slow motion down a titanic waterfall. It was just cold enough to make the hairs on the back of his neck stand up, and dull whatever he could smell of the place, but there was still that faint scent of an unnatural... thing. Something ancient and rotting, and not quite chemical although he almost tasted ammonia in the assaulting concoction. It was a substance hidden within the magical pretense of the abandoned cottage. He felt the coin in his pocket, his good luck charm; it had been with him through the ages, and its faces were worn smooth by his fiddlings. With a couple circles of his thumb over its edge, he hoped it would see him through to the end of this situation, too."

I'd write more but I just woke up and am headed for work lol.

One other piece of advice I guess is, read literature that you like and would want to emulate in your own writing, dissect it, even. What makes this scene powerful/emotional/feel hazardous? Are the protag's goals being realistically hindered by this or that, and are the stakes high enough? Etcetera.

Good luck!