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*Sigh* Fine. MAYBE I'll kill Zadolt. 50/50 odds.
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You know what I'll flip a coin. Heads for no death, tails for death.
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If you kill- wait- damn it. I shouldn't have asked you to make Karin. How about Karin dies?
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If anobody wants to plot potential deaths - hi. I'm here, I got you aha I won't reveal much, but I do know that some of my characters are not going to have happy endings :')
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Also- for A Dream of Darkness- I mentioned Jaro is looking for a village so that she can actually survive and such- Should I just make her find a village in the next chapter and have her sell Wolf (her brothers horse) so she can get the money (might just be called gold) to get supplies, or should I re-write the first few chapters a little and foreshadow that the village could have some family members from her mothers side that she never met that give her everything for free pretty much? I feel like that's too much good luck, that she finds them and they take care of her for a while- but then I realize she just watched her entire family be murdered so I have no idea XD
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I would say she stumbles across the village and finds a family member by coincidence. Maybe an aunt or uncle. Perhaps this relative isn't doing so well, (low income, poor living conditions, whatever), so it's good luck Jaro found them but doesn't really benefit her.
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Maybe. My dad says that coincidence just seems like I didn't plan it and that its lazy writing, so I should make her mother mention that she has family in a nearby village... hmmm... but that's a good idea, making it so that the family member doesn't have much to begin with. I just don't want Jaro to be a thief just yet XD
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True. But foreshadowing should be very subtle or very blatantly mentioned - to me, this sort of convinience is too lucky to be planned ahead. It almost feels forced? But yes, subtle mentions of this relative would work :')
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